I have been do riding about:
My shoes were soaked and the rain wouldn’t stop. A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me.
We have been learning about writing important words.
Strong words that you must include:
- Blustery
- Exquisite
- Fragile
- Disillusioned
1.
My shoes were soaked and the rain wouldn’t stop. Fragile
Because Rain is sad until it's happy And then it will stop raining
2.
A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me. Disillusioned
You don' no who's in the car It might be a robber trying to kidnap you
don't go up to a car pulled up beside you ti si only if it is your mum or dad and you can go up to the car
blue words Farm Miss D feedback
Positive:
- Good effort trying to use each descriptive word
- I’m impressed by your independent writing
Next step:
- Imagine you are the character in the story. Instead of saying ‘you’ say ‘I’ ....
A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me. Disillusioned,
I didn't no who's in the car. It might be a robber trying to kidnap me.
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