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Thursday, October 24, 2019

writing 2

Hello guys



I have been  do riding about: 
My shoes were soaked and the rain wouldn’t stop. A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me.

We have been learning about writing important words.



Strong words that you must include:
  • Blustery
  • Exquisite
  • Fragile
  • Disillusioned



1.
 My shoes were soaked and the rain wouldn’t stop. Fragile
Because Rain is sad   until it's happy And then it will stop raining


 2.
 A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me.  Disillusioned
You don' no  who's in the car  It might be a robber trying to kidnap you 
don't go up to a car pulled up beside you ti si only if it is your mum or dad and you can go up to the car

blue words Farm Miss D feedback

Positive:
  • Good effort trying to use each descriptive word
  • I’m impressed by your independent writing
Next step:
  • Imagine you are the character in the story. Instead of saying ‘you’ say ‘I’ ....
 A grey car I didn’t recognise pulled up beside me.  Disillusioned,
I didn't no who's in the car.  It might be a robber trying to kidnap me.

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1 comment:

  1. Hello Adriaan.I found it a little hard to read your story as part of it is missing.The sentences don't completely fit in the space.Can you catch up with me at school and tell me about your story,as I would like to know what you have written?.

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